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Lake Erie
Lake Erie
Half frozen;My body floats still in the frigid water thats surrounding me! I know longer can swim My lifes passing before my eyes! The only thing I feel is the beating of my heart, Now slowing down,more silent it becomes, but much deeper the poundig is in my chest. I'm fading away; My time hear, Is almost done. Come quickly! Death unto me! OH PLeASe God, Take away my fear; release me; and set My spirit free! Vanessa Michelle Pattie © 2004 Vanessa Michelle Pattie (Listed under: Hardship) TIP: You can doubleclick any word with the left mouse button, to get its definition. Your vote has been counted!   (156 votes, average 3,81)Please consider the following when voting Sound values: Such as alliteration and rhyme. Rhythm: The effective use of line lengths and beat (including meter, but also including free verse lines). Imagery: The use of images to express and convey meaning and to create the mood and shape of the poem. Diction: Choice of words, figures of speech, syntactical patterns. Line groups: Stanzas in traditional forms, verse paragraphs in free verse. |
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